Bleakradiance Tue Sep 11, 2012 11:21 pm
There we go! This show was a tonne better than Raw! I love the way the whole thing was delivered.
First off, let me just say that the way you handled Booker T, and writing for the GM was brilliantly done I could easily see him making all of these same decisions.
The first Beat the Clock match, has to be one of only two small issues I can critique. Seemed to me like it came in a little shorter than the clock would indicate, and you could have given a bit more to each paragraph of the match, maybe had a commercial to fill time if need be.
Next, the other bit of criticism. I found that your Dialogue for Damien Sandow seemed a little off, "Screwed" seems to be a bit of a lowbrow term for him to use, over all his language didn't seem quite appropriate for him.
Everything else was very well done, I loved Wade Barrett's promo! The way you wrote Troy really worked for me, both in the ring and in his backstage behaviour.
The Main event (Particularly the first two parts) Had to be my favorite matches of the night there was a great fast pace to them , and I was really getting into both matches. Sure I may have been biased toward loving Arcade's debut but honestly it was more that you captured his style as I'd seen it perfectly. I can't complain about Troy losing because the match was great, and honestly, Del Rio's win was far more believable than any other outcome, so I'm glad there even thought I lost the debut. Ultimately after what Del Rio went through the Squash at the end makes a lot of sense, though Ryback still hasn't proved anything. I'm sure in coming weeks he'll be majorly tested.
All in all, this show's getting a solid A! Good work man.